I'm participating in the Six Sentence Sunday challenge again. This is a website where writers post links to samples of their writing. This week, I'm number 180.
This sample, again from The Bones of the Earth, follows last Sunday's post immediately. Here, our hero, Javor, the strange young man from the north, is seeking answers to his parents' murder and his great-grandfather's perplexing weapon.
The six sentences:
“Find our old Order at Chalkoprateia. From there, you must seek the four hundred. Only the four hundred can end this war.” The wind got stronger and Javor could hear strange noises in it.
“What are the four hundred?”
Sophia answered, “There is no time—they are coming!”
Want more samples? Check out Six Sentence Sunday.
You can get the full version of The Bones of the Earth from Amazon or Smashwords.
And as always, any feedback in the form of the Comments, below, is appreciated.
This sample, again from The Bones of the Earth, follows last Sunday's post immediately. Here, our hero, Javor, the strange young man from the north, is seeking answers to his parents' murder and his great-grandfather's perplexing weapon.
The six sentences:
“Find our old Order at Chalkoprateia. From there, you must seek the four hundred. Only the four hundred can end this war.” The wind got stronger and Javor could hear strange noises in it.
“What are the four hundred?”
Sophia answered, “There is no time—they are coming!”
Want more samples? Check out Six Sentence Sunday.
You can get the full version of The Bones of the Earth from Amazon or Smashwords.
And as always, any feedback in the form of the Comments, below, is appreciated.
Ah, I love when imperatives come with no explanations :) Nice six!
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful 6!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting. Love messages in the wind.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing! I love a cliffhanger :-)
ReplyDeleteThis was great! I'm popping over from the Platform Building Campaign. I look forward to getting to know you and your work. ~Cheers
ReplyDeleteHey Scott! Thank you for telling me that I have 'as he' a lot in my flash fiction story. I miss these things because I read it so much and just didn't see it. Thanks again, I appreciate your honesty!
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure. I'd appreciate you pointing out any deficiencies or weired overuses in my work, too. I know I tend to use "then" a lot.
DeleteGood choice of sentences, Scott. I like the suspense!
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